m- yo, man you come here lots?
h- not really just the past few weeks.
m- why's that?
h- well my friends rather fancy this place.
m- ya i guess it is pretty good.
m- kind of boring sometimes though..
h- ya, true but if you decided to make it fun it can be!
m- i see what your saying, but the girls!
h- what about em'?
m- some days there are lots and some days there are none.
m- know what i mean?
h- ya ya i guess you just gotta choose the right days to come.
m- mmhm well i'm off to go spike the punch so see ya!
h- late! see you around.
This scene finally got interesting when the guy says he's going to leave to go spike the punch. That's where you should've started. That's what this scene should've been about.
ReplyDeletem- well, I'm off to spike the punch.
h- dude, no. we'll get busted.
m- we've got to do something to liven up this party.
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